...oh, that is so nice... I loved how you worked in Ron being the Keeper, and Ron automatically getting lost in his fantasy. I feel sorry for Hermione - having the wrong named moaned out when you're making out with someone is definitely not a nice thing to experience - but I feel for Ron, who now will feel doubly isolated from both of his best friends.
And now that Harry's seen the two of them just before the fateful slap, and drawn all the wrong conclusions, he'll most likely try to leave them alone as much as possible so that they can have privacy, and so he doesn't have to watch (can you blame him, really?) Poor Harry. Poor Ron. You both write with such compellingly real characterisation and beautiful, evocative imagery and word usage, that I can see these scenes happening, two points-of-view dancing misguidedly around each other.
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Date: 2003-05-23 05:36 am (UTC)And now that Harry's seen the two of them just before the fateful slap, and drawn all the wrong conclusions, he'll most likely try to leave them alone as much as possible so that they can have privacy, and so he doesn't have to watch (can you blame him, really?) Poor Harry. Poor Ron. You both write with such compellingly real characterisation and beautiful, evocative imagery and word usage, that I can see these scenes happening, two points-of-view dancing misguidedly around each other.
Jen / Quoth the Raven